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Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Hayden — Mon, 18 Mar 2013 07:45:37 GMT

Author: Hayden

Posted: 03/18/2013 11:45

First song was my favourite.

And you have some good lines 😄 But don't limit yourself just to direct one or two syllable rhymes. Just my advice 😄

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Mon, 18 Mar 2013 06:22:37 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 10:22

Really liked all of these, mostly the first and the last one. You have talent.

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Mon, 18 Mar 2013 00:01:49 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 04:01

toot1231 wrote:

Joy Division is my inspiration that might be why the lyrics sound depressing.

They're not your only inspiration, right? (though Joy Division is great)
I find that when someone has one particular inspiration, their work tends to seem more like a petty imitation, you know? Try to be inspired by many things, and sort of combine them. Or, if you're a genius, you just say "Fuck inspiration!" and you sort of pull things out of nowhere. I think they (meaning geniuses) have a Magic Bag of Tricks, like Felix the Cat. Where can I get one? XD

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

toot1231 — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:55:34 GMT

Author: toot1231

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:55

Joy Division is my inspiration that might be why the lyrics sound depressing.

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:32:17 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:32

On a professional scale I'd say 2.5 out of 5. Which is average for a professional writer so I'd say very good.

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:24:41 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:24

I enjoyed them.

These two lines especially:

"growing concience talking dead. when im not paranoid im talking to them"

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:22:05 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:22

Actually, I feel like 3 should be 3/5. The first one is surreal and has a lot of great imagery, and gives you things to think about, but the last two seem to be just angry. That isn't bad in itself, but the lyrics are a bit less interesting because of it.

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:15:05 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:15

I wanna hear more about this metaphorical puppeteer of the mind

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:12:33 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:12

I'm a writer, and I love words, I am qualified to rate song lyrics. XD

1. 5/5 I love it.
2. 4/5 Not as good. I don't know why. What, did you expect me to use fancy terms and sound sophisticated? Hell, did you expect me to tell you why I liked them? Psh...
3. 4/5

Re: Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

Anonymous — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 23:00:52 GMT

Author: Anonymous

Posted: 03/18/2013 03:00

It's a bold move, Cotton. Let's see how it pays off.

Rate Some of My Song Lyrics

toot1231 — Sun, 17 Mar 2013 22:52:54 GMT

Author: toot1231

Posted: 03/18/2013 02:52

Ima just post my song lyrics here I want you guys to rate them and tell me if you like them. 1/5 ratings please.

1.theres someone behind my back
when i break my spine, it dosnt grow back.

im fine without out it
i dont even care.
the dream cloud is over there

fall away
far far away from heaven.
and fall away thee.
far away from, the
fall away from thee.

so please come in
have some tea and bring
in all the demons you
have. take me to
the colors that surround you.
and get me closer to them
I wanna walk away and tell
my friends to leave
within this web we weaved

growing concience talking dead.
when im not paranoid im talking to them.

just leave, let me be.
shes in the coffin let her sleep.

far away
far far away from heaven.
and far away thee.
far away from, the
far away from thee.

so please come in
have some tea and bring
in all the demons you
have. take to me to
the colors that surround you.
and get me closer to them
I wanna walk away and tell
my friends to leave
within a web im weaving.

and shes talking in her sleep.
waiting for me.
i hear her crying.
please come to me.

if theres 1 thing i wanna know
when we die where do we go

i hear them, they speak to you
mortals cant hear them but they hear you.

somewhere near the giving tree
beside the falling leaves
growing skys with hollowed
eyes they can feel you now.

2.Today was like any other day.
I thought of thoughts then they
went away.

i had friend but never told him
he was just fake.

got a knife from behind my back
now i wont listen to a thing
i said

Good morning sunshine why are you away
I thought it was gonna be a good day.

Good night Moon i know you're sad.
but you could be a hero if i knew what you said.

but you know...x5

Hello my friend it has been along time
still trying to find that same bright light

Hello my friend its been a ruff night
just lay your head and turn off the lights.

Hello my friend how are you today
seems my life is not gonna change.

Hello my friend

I love myself more than anyone i know, thats
why i have no where to go

I hate my relatives but thats ok I just hate them because
i cant relate.

a knife to cut you in your sleep its alright you wont feel a
thing.

Make me up, and make me out Im still living with tons of doubt

I know more than you will ever know
I do nothing to concern myself
I know the way
I know the way

but you know...

Hello my friend it has been along time
still trying to find that same bright light

Hello my friend its been a ruff night
just lay you head and turn of the lights.

3.theres puppet strings controlling my brain
Makes me feel like im going insane

You are nothing compared to me
I wanna kill you

I read your mind
why wont you believe me

Im alive and im doin fine
with my own time
in my life

Im alive and im doin fine
with my own time
in my mind

The obstacles are far away from me
I wanna teach you how to keep

all those secrets close to me
I wanna steal you

And im alive
and im fine
why wont you believe

Im alive and im doin fine
with my own time
in my mind

Ooo I feared this
Ooo I feared this
ooo and I feel this
this salt
this salt
this sand
this salt
this salt
the land