Some *Good* Demos to my *Good* Album

[Applerill]

Hey, guys!

So, in a few months, I'm going to be releasing Charlie N. George's new album, Tales of Slipknot Oceans. I know that most of my work in the past was really bad, but this album marks a huge departure in sound for us; We have lots of industrial and doom metal (and even a pinch of shoegaze :p) influence along with the obvious Captain Beefheart stuff.

To show you how much we've changed, I wanted to show you guys a pair of demos from my new album. They're both mostly instrumental, and they still need a few more tweaks, but I really like them. But when I showed them to my mom (who hates almost any challenging music in general), she still hated it. So I wanted to see what you professional music guys thought of these tracks.

Electric Trumpet (an Electric Wizard-esque medley)
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/7278513/Electric%20Trumpet.m4a

Cubbie's Nightmare (IT'S NOT DUBSTEP!!! GARRRR!!!!!)
http://www.megaupload.com/?d=OZW9CWFC

So, what do you think, guys? Any constructive criticism would be great. Thanks!
-Charlie

[GARY]

It won't let me listen to Cubbie's Nightmare.


Electric Trumpet, constructive criticism,

I do like coughing in songs. Like this one which is the intro to sweet leaf.


Link



I really like the anti-government lyrics

Now, this is just me, and I'm a rather dark character musically. More often than not, I start out with a nice feeling inside and intend on making upbeat music, only to have it twist into a dark and doomed sound.

I would darken Electric Trumpet by having the vocals tweaked sonically into a more "electric" voice and maybe mix it down an octave.

And maybe add a whispering voice out of one channel saying Illuminati.

But that's just me. I'm with Lennon as far as not wanting to fill the world with silly love songs.

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[Applerill]